Post by acclue lockheart on Jan 24, 2008 16:27:30 GMT -5
Alright I made this back around when I first started writing and it's gone through many incarnations as I got better at writing, and this is the latest. It's an afterlife story, and it might not make much sense in the first chapter... oh well, I need feedback on this kinda stuff and I promise it'll make more sense later. ^^;;
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Tranquil be thou't not young dead. Tisn't the end of thy suffering. What thou has't done shan't be forgot, but not upon this world will thy spirit wake. Nay, I be not that merciful.
Though ye expect thy eternal rest, thou cans't not be left in solitude when such potential heroism runs through thy veins. Nay, the end shan't come to ye for a long while. Another task of the living need be done. And another. A vicious cycle it be, but the good of eternity be more important than a feeling thou cans't not understand in new life.
But wait... A disturbance is near... But no , this presence cans't not be true!
...
It seems I've no choice now. The fates rest upon thy thread and ask it be cut... So be it. The end of thy life may be worth more than this cycle may ever be.
This be not an award I give thee, nor a punishment. Peace will finally come to ye once this realm be purged of its evil presence.
The only regret I know be that ye coulds't not take a more suitable form for this endeavor, but time is short, and it shalt not wait for ye to grow older. Go now. And in death, your spirit finally be freed...
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The previous is a message I recieved before that fateful day so long ago. It was mostly just cryptic nonsense to me, but I felt as if it were God himself speaking to me... I know that can't be true now though.
My name is Tyler Snow. I'm a ten-year-old boy from Earth. And I'm dead. Beyond that I don't remember. This place has robbed me from more than my life.
I cannot remember much before the day I entered this world, it's a tormenting place that screws with your head. Yet...
It may be that I've grown used to this place, or that I've succumbed to it's lure, but my time here hasn't been all that bad in the long run.
It hasn't been hell, but it hasn't been heaven either. What I've become isn't a blessing, nor a curse, it just is.
I know one thing though. If there is a way, and I will find a way, I will return home. This is not my end.
Chapter I: Fifteen Minutes of Hell
A heartbeat. That's what it all began with. I felt a massive pain in my chest as my heart seemingly leapt back to life.
I couldn't concentrate enough to move my stiffened limbs, but I could feel them there. I thought it was a miracle that I was alive, even though every inch of my body was in terrible agony.
My hearing returned to me quickly, the rush of wind hitting against them made it impossible to hear myself think.
I gasped for air against the current forcing it's way down my throat.
My senses returned to me all at once and my eyes burst open and then shut again as the rush instantly dried them.
I felt I was falling now, and the panic hit me. Spinning myself around onto my back, I let out a yell for help, which may very well have been my saving grace.
I turned my head to my side and saw my destination out of the corner of my unblinded eye. Beneath me, what seemed like kilometers away, was a massive city, all black in the night.
I let out another scream and struggled in a futile attempt to stop myself.
I could see to my side, that I wasn't alone. It looked as if there were other human shapes falling, their shouts inaudible over the splitting wind.
In the distance, another shape, this one only relatively human-like, actually moved up towards one of the farthest humans. It flew right by and the human disappeared.
Where the hell was I?! Was this some kind of freaky dream?! Questions rushed through my head like a bullet.
I wanted to scream for help again upon the other's disappearance, but my throat refused to work. I felt I was going to throw up soon.
So there it was. I was plummeting to the ground at a steadily increasing speed. My skin was freezing into a burn from the wind. I was paralyzed with fear, both for my impact with the ground and for the creatures clipping off the others like me.
I wasn't far now from the ground, and I braced for impact the best a ten-year-old human boy could.
My back struck first, the hit winding me and making blood spurt out of my mouth. I was moving far too fast to feel much of the force on the first surface I hit. I had struck a building, and the roof was torn like paper at my speed.
My pain continued to grow exponentially to heights I'd never before thought were possible as I struck the next floor down. And the next one. And three more floor dividers.
I finally came to a crashing halt when my body struck the basement floor with an exploding crash.
... I was still conscious... well, barely. I couldn't breath at all, and I could hear my own heartbeat again, slowing to a near standstill.
I could only see for a moment every few seconds as my heart contracted. The building cracked almost in half at the hole I had made. Only a few seconds after I had landed, the building literally fell into two and the upper parts shifted, just barely supporting eachother now.
It was quiet. I couldn't hear the building shifting. Had I been deafened as well?
A figure stood, looking down at me from the floor above. It jumped down toward me and stood over my weakened body. It was a woman... a rather... scantilly clad woman to say the least. All that covered her were a tattered black skirt and a strip of cloth covering very little of her upper body, and not leaving much to the imagination
"Ahh..." she sounded so far away "It's never been this easy before... Relax, you won't have to worry about this world anymore."
As she leaned over, I saw, on her back, a pair of large purple webbed wings. A tail with a spaded tip swung excitedly to her front. Was she some kind of monster? I was too weak to run away if she was. I was completely at her mercy.
She waved her hand down toward me and lifted it up. My pain suddenly vanished, in fact, it was pure ecstasy just looking at this creature. I could breath again, but... I couldn't turn away. She pulled her hand toward herself slowly, and a blue light began to glow, swirling in place as a little orb. This made me feel even better. It took me only a moment to realize that this blue light was being brought out from my own body.
She stared viciously at me with her deep red eyes... What the hell was she doing to me?!
I felt as if I was being pulled out of my body, I shifted toward the light and everything went black.
"Hey, asshole!" a different female voice cried out. I heard a loud crash and I was thrown back into my body with force. Everything was pain, and it felt like I was rammed through five layers of concrete at terminal velocity again.
Over me now stood a different strange girl. She wore a dark green sweater and baggy black sweatpants. Behind her were wings as well, but these were bat-like and small compared to her body size. She had a tail as well, but this was round and covered with fur, like a cat's tail. Similarly, her ears were also cat-like: large and pointed near th top of her head rather than the side. Long black hair ran freely down her back, and her eyes were as deep a red as the other creature's.
She held a gigantic hammer on the end of a polearm over her head. It almost looked like a comical weapon, if the one end weren't spattered with fresh blood. She looked at me with a stern look on her face.
I struggled to keep myself breathing, but I coughed hard and choked on an unfamiliar air. The creature blurred slowly, then cleared up again. My vision pulsed in and out a few more times and my breathing halted again... then my heartbeat...
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Tranquil be thou't not young dead. Tisn't the end of thy suffering. What thou has't done shan't be forgot, but not upon this world will thy spirit wake. Nay, I be not that merciful.
Though ye expect thy eternal rest, thou cans't not be left in solitude when such potential heroism runs through thy veins. Nay, the end shan't come to ye for a long while. Another task of the living need be done. And another. A vicious cycle it be, but the good of eternity be more important than a feeling thou cans't not understand in new life.
But wait... A disturbance is near... But no , this presence cans't not be true!
...
It seems I've no choice now. The fates rest upon thy thread and ask it be cut... So be it. The end of thy life may be worth more than this cycle may ever be.
This be not an award I give thee, nor a punishment. Peace will finally come to ye once this realm be purged of its evil presence.
The only regret I know be that ye coulds't not take a more suitable form for this endeavor, but time is short, and it shalt not wait for ye to grow older. Go now. And in death, your spirit finally be freed...
-----
The previous is a message I recieved before that fateful day so long ago. It was mostly just cryptic nonsense to me, but I felt as if it were God himself speaking to me... I know that can't be true now though.
My name is Tyler Snow. I'm a ten-year-old boy from Earth. And I'm dead. Beyond that I don't remember. This place has robbed me from more than my life.
I cannot remember much before the day I entered this world, it's a tormenting place that screws with your head. Yet...
It may be that I've grown used to this place, or that I've succumbed to it's lure, but my time here hasn't been all that bad in the long run.
It hasn't been hell, but it hasn't been heaven either. What I've become isn't a blessing, nor a curse, it just is.
I know one thing though. If there is a way, and I will find a way, I will return home. This is not my end.
Chapter I: Fifteen Minutes of Hell
A heartbeat. That's what it all began with. I felt a massive pain in my chest as my heart seemingly leapt back to life.
I couldn't concentrate enough to move my stiffened limbs, but I could feel them there. I thought it was a miracle that I was alive, even though every inch of my body was in terrible agony.
My hearing returned to me quickly, the rush of wind hitting against them made it impossible to hear myself think.
I gasped for air against the current forcing it's way down my throat.
My senses returned to me all at once and my eyes burst open and then shut again as the rush instantly dried them.
I felt I was falling now, and the panic hit me. Spinning myself around onto my back, I let out a yell for help, which may very well have been my saving grace.
I turned my head to my side and saw my destination out of the corner of my unblinded eye. Beneath me, what seemed like kilometers away, was a massive city, all black in the night.
I let out another scream and struggled in a futile attempt to stop myself.
I could see to my side, that I wasn't alone. It looked as if there were other human shapes falling, their shouts inaudible over the splitting wind.
In the distance, another shape, this one only relatively human-like, actually moved up towards one of the farthest humans. It flew right by and the human disappeared.
Where the hell was I?! Was this some kind of freaky dream?! Questions rushed through my head like a bullet.
I wanted to scream for help again upon the other's disappearance, but my throat refused to work. I felt I was going to throw up soon.
So there it was. I was plummeting to the ground at a steadily increasing speed. My skin was freezing into a burn from the wind. I was paralyzed with fear, both for my impact with the ground and for the creatures clipping off the others like me.
I wasn't far now from the ground, and I braced for impact the best a ten-year-old human boy could.
My back struck first, the hit winding me and making blood spurt out of my mouth. I was moving far too fast to feel much of the force on the first surface I hit. I had struck a building, and the roof was torn like paper at my speed.
My pain continued to grow exponentially to heights I'd never before thought were possible as I struck the next floor down. And the next one. And three more floor dividers.
I finally came to a crashing halt when my body struck the basement floor with an exploding crash.
... I was still conscious... well, barely. I couldn't breath at all, and I could hear my own heartbeat again, slowing to a near standstill.
I could only see for a moment every few seconds as my heart contracted. The building cracked almost in half at the hole I had made. Only a few seconds after I had landed, the building literally fell into two and the upper parts shifted, just barely supporting eachother now.
It was quiet. I couldn't hear the building shifting. Had I been deafened as well?
A figure stood, looking down at me from the floor above. It jumped down toward me and stood over my weakened body. It was a woman... a rather... scantilly clad woman to say the least. All that covered her were a tattered black skirt and a strip of cloth covering very little of her upper body, and not leaving much to the imagination
"Ahh..." she sounded so far away "It's never been this easy before... Relax, you won't have to worry about this world anymore."
As she leaned over, I saw, on her back, a pair of large purple webbed wings. A tail with a spaded tip swung excitedly to her front. Was she some kind of monster? I was too weak to run away if she was. I was completely at her mercy.
She waved her hand down toward me and lifted it up. My pain suddenly vanished, in fact, it was pure ecstasy just looking at this creature. I could breath again, but... I couldn't turn away. She pulled her hand toward herself slowly, and a blue light began to glow, swirling in place as a little orb. This made me feel even better. It took me only a moment to realize that this blue light was being brought out from my own body.
She stared viciously at me with her deep red eyes... What the hell was she doing to me?!
I felt as if I was being pulled out of my body, I shifted toward the light and everything went black.
"Hey, asshole!" a different female voice cried out. I heard a loud crash and I was thrown back into my body with force. Everything was pain, and it felt like I was rammed through five layers of concrete at terminal velocity again.
Over me now stood a different strange girl. She wore a dark green sweater and baggy black sweatpants. Behind her were wings as well, but these were bat-like and small compared to her body size. She had a tail as well, but this was round and covered with fur, like a cat's tail. Similarly, her ears were also cat-like: large and pointed near th top of her head rather than the side. Long black hair ran freely down her back, and her eyes were as deep a red as the other creature's.
She held a gigantic hammer on the end of a polearm over her head. It almost looked like a comical weapon, if the one end weren't spattered with fresh blood. She looked at me with a stern look on her face.
I struggled to keep myself breathing, but I coughed hard and choked on an unfamiliar air. The creature blurred slowly, then cleared up again. My vision pulsed in and out a few more times and my breathing halted again... then my heartbeat...
