Post by WAR on Nov 2, 2007 9:06:10 GMT -5
Okay, so I'm not entirely sure if this is just you making a little social life type of thing for your actual character in D2, or if you plan to use this character in an RP or fanfic. If it's the former, then just disregard everything I'm about to say ALL OF IT. This is only meant as constructive criticism if you plan to unleash Wolf out into the RP/FF world. If so...
....NO. HELL NO. You've broken about a dozen and a half cardinal rules in there. First of all, main characters don't have long-lost siblings. EVAR. EVAAAAR. An Exodus at 700? Nope. Moves that are story-character only? NOOO. Apparently she's only been friends with Etna for a bit, then WHY has she learned some of her best moves? And WHY does she know fist moves when she clearly uses a bow? Why are all her friends final tier, and so damn POWERFUL? Last I checked, siblings of Adell live in Holt. Holt's strongest resident is level 100, not counting the Dimension Gate or any other characters that aren't "Permanent", per se. And whom is this David person? How can she know Flonne and Laharl, much less hate them? And if she's blind, then surely she's learned some self-control? No matter how you look at it, even if blind people DID have some way to see, they never, EVER run in "just for the trill." The Axel hate, I can understand at least.
....NO. HELL NO. You've broken about a dozen and a half cardinal rules in there. First of all, main characters don't have long-lost siblings. EVAR. EVAAAAR. An Exodus at 700? Nope. Moves that are story-character only? NOOO. Apparently she's only been friends with Etna for a bit, then WHY has she learned some of her best moves? And WHY does she know fist moves when she clearly uses a bow? Why are all her friends final tier, and so damn POWERFUL? Last I checked, siblings of Adell live in Holt. Holt's strongest resident is level 100, not counting the Dimension Gate or any other characters that aren't "Permanent", per se. And whom is this David person? How can she know Flonne and Laharl, much less hate them? And if she's blind, then surely she's learned some self-control? No matter how you look at it, even if blind people DID have some way to see, they never, EVER run in "just for the trill." The Axel hate, I can understand at least.